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.**Writing Task 1: The Basics** Step 1: Write a complete story with a beginning, middle, and ending. You may only use "simple sentences" on this page. Write at least 20 simple sentences.

There are 5 simple sentence formats: (See pages 4 & 5 in handout for examples.) 1a.S+V. 1b. S+V and V. 1c. S and S + V.

2a. S+V+C. (C=prepositional phrase) 2b. S+V+C. (C=adverb) 2c. S+V+C. (C=adjective) 2d. S+V+C. (C=noun)

3. S+V+O. 4. S+V+DO+IO. 5. S+V+IO+DO.


 * Writing Task 1:**

Possible Topics: 1. Ayaka have Pandorum too.(Pandorum means, everyone have Pandorum box in your mind which box surface looks like exquisite, mysterious, fascinating. The box inside hide some personality characteristic, it could be good character or bad,and have strong powerful attract you open it.) Pandorum sounds like a very interesting topic for your story!!!!

Write your story here:

1. The story 's main character is Ayaka. fixed 2. She is a Japanese girl. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed 3. She lives in Hokkaido. 4. She studies Hokkaido University. -Check S+V agreement. fixed Ø 5. __In her adolescence__. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence. It is a prepositional phrase. (Great vocabulary!) 6. ​She doesn’t has a good relationship with other people. -with whom? -Check S+V agreement. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed

7. She has a pessimistic notion. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed

8. She has melancholy. 9. She has an part-time job. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed

10. She works in the bookstore. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed

11. She works harder than other people. 12. She is interested in reading. -Excellent use of last week's gerund rule!!!!!!!! However, where's the verb? fixed 13. Her favorite book is “I have Pandorum too”. 14. The book describe the one person. 14-1. The person has melancholy. -Check S+V agreement. - There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence. fixed

15. The person is a woman. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed

16. Her name is Pandorum. 17. Pandorum has a pessimistic notion. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed

18. Her characteristic is like Ayaka. 19. One of the events is in the book. -Where is the verb? This is a noun phrase (subject). fixed 20. She feels people. 20-1. People doesn’t care her. - There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence. fixed

21. She feels her family. 21-1. Her family doesn’t like her. - There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence. fixed

22. She feel her friend. 22-1. Her friend doesn’t like her. - There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence. fixed

23. She has strong desire idea in her mind. - Check S+V agreement. fixed 24. Her brin is like a box. Her brain is like a box. fixed 25. She opened it. 26. She thinks who am I?  26-1. She thinks where am I? 26-2. She thinks how long I slept? 26-3. She thinks what I am doing? 26-4. She thinks why I am in here? - There are 6 clauses in this sentence.....Change it. fixed 27. These messages move around in her mind.- What is the verb? move-or- swirl-or- race fixed Ø 28. __In one day__. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence. It is a prepositional phrase. 29. Sh e met the preacher. -What verb tense---present or past? 30. The preacher told her about God. 31. The preacher told her about Jesus. 32. She starts go to church. -This is an infinitive. fixed Ø 33. __Day by Day__. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence. 34. She was recovered.

35. Ayaka has a dream. 36. She likes to travel to Canada. 37. She goes to Canada. 38. She meets the guy. 39. His name is Jack. 40. Jack is from Canada. -Where is the verb? fixed 41. He live s in Vancouver. -Check the S+V agreement. fixed 42. Jack and Ayaka are studies in the same University. fixed 43. Jack is a pyschologist. 42. Ayaka and Jack fall in love. 43. Jack become s aware of Ayaka. 43-1. Ayaka has some trouble. . -Check the S+V agreement. -Make 2 sentences for #43. fixed

44. He tr ies to remedy her sickness. . -Check the S+V agreement. fixed

45. He made it. 46. Ayaka is a health y people now. -This is a noun. Please change it into an adjective. fixed 47. She succe eded. -Check spelling. fixed 48. They plan to get maried. -"get married" fixed 49. Ayaka went to Japan to tell her parents. 50. Her parents didn't accept the marriage .-Change this verb into a NOUN. fixed 51. Ayaka go es back to Canada. . -Check the S+V agreement. fixed

52. She did n 't change her idea.- Spelling fixed 53. Jack's friend is Maria. 54. Maria is a Canadian wom a n. - Plural or Singular? fixed 55. Maria and her all friends helped Ayaka and Jack. 56. Ayaka's mother accept s the married. . -Check the S+V agreement. fixed

57. Ayaka mother will attend the married. 58. Ayaka father will not attend the married. 59. Ayaka and Jack get a married. -The verb is "get married". We'll talk about it in class : ) fixed Ø 60. __The end__. Delete ( I will add this noun phrase to step 5.)