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Step 2: Rewrite the story from Step 1, but combine some of the sentences using "Coordination". (See p 7 & p 8 in the BASICs Handout.) You may only use "simple sentences" & "compound sentences" on this page.
 * Writing Task 1: The Basics**

Title:Ayaka have Pandorum too

1. The story main character is a Ayaka and she is a Japanese girl. 2. She lives in Hokkaido and studies in Hokkaido University. 3. She doesn’t has good a relationship in the adolecence, for she has pessimistic notion and melancholy. 4. She work part-time in the bookstore, and she work harder than other people. 5. She can't control her emotion, but She is interested in reading, because she hates to discuss with people. 6. Her favorite book is not only “I have Pandorum too”, but she has other books. 7. 8. The book describe the one person who has melancholy.

9. The person is woman, and her name is Pandorum. 10. Pandorum has a pessimistic notion, because she has a bad character. 11. Her characteristic like Ayaka. 12. . ​ 13. One of the event in the book She feel people doesn’t care her in her life. 14. She feel her family doesn’t like her, nor her friend. 15. She has strong idea in her mind, so her brin is just like a box. 16. She opened it,because she can't bear her curiously. 17.She not only think who am I? but also think where am I? How long I slept? What I am doing? Why I am in here? 18. These messages move around in her mind for a long time. 19. In one day, she met the preacher. 21. The preacher told her about either God or Jesus when she go to the church. 22. She starts go to church everyday. 23. After day by day and she was recovered.

24. Ayaka has a dream. 25. She likes travel to Canada, for she didn't travel to any country. 26. She goes to Canada and studies English. 27. She meets the guy and his name is Jack 28. Jack lives in the Vancouver from Canada, but he didn't live here. 29. Jack and Ayaka studies in the same University, but they are studies different major. 30. Jack's major is psychology and Ayaka's major is English language. 31. They studies together and fall in love. 32. Jack becomes aware of Ayaka have some problem about melancholy. 33. He try to remedy her sickness, because he loves her. 34. He made it and Ayaka is a healthy people now. 35. She succeeded, so they plan to married. 36. Ayaka went to Japan to tell her parents, but her parents didn't accept the married. 37. Ayaka goes back to Canada and she did't change her idea. 38. Jack's friend is Maria. 49. Bothe Jack and Maria are good friend of Ayaka. 40. Maria is a Canadian woman. 41. Maria and her all frieds helped Ayaka and Jack. 42. Ayaka mother accepts the married. 43. Ayaka mother will attend the wedding, but her father won't. 44. Ayaka and Jack have a married. 45. The end.